Moriah Leila

When you are critiquing someone's work I have noticed that other people are able to pull quotes directly from the story and do some editing in nice little boxes. How ...

You are still sceptical. Skeptical. Yet, that, that is merely the beginning of so much more. The second that sounds like it should be changed to this. I liked it, ...

Here it is, the first section of the second chapter. I'd really appreciate your feedback, especially if you think it is horrible. I am so new at Fantasy that I ...

This is the end of chapter one so let me know what you think!!! Thanks for your reviews!! As she escaped back out into the fresh air Amarie reflected on ...

I liked it. I am really glad Cal didn't get back together with Ashley, Joanne was better for him. I'd like more because I'd really like to hear how their ...

Again, you have another satisfied customer. I love this story so much because I can kind of relate to Ashley and I can also relate to Joanne. It is such ...

I loved it!!! Even with you jumping from different perspectives and different times I loved it. It was so descriptive and deep and exciting. You kept me anticipating more just ...

I know I am probably going to sound redundant but I totally agree that the story feels rushed. Slow down and throw in some descriptions. Develop your characters so that ...

Here is another section. Give me your most honest feedback. Sorry if it is a bit long I was trying to divide the chapter up into four sections. Sun filtered ...

At this chance, she fussed through the collapsed tent until she found him caught in the broken rope. Not sure if I like the use of the word fussed. I ...

Let me know what you think!!!! Back downstairs Amarie choose a round table close to the massive fire place. Early spring still brought a chill to the nights of Chevara ...

I liked it. I was expecting something that followed the plot of the Harry Potter books and when that didn't happen I was so pleased. I mean other than pyhsical ...

My chapters are long so I will divide them into sections. This is just a sampling, there is more to come! But be brutally honest and let me know what ...

I liked the story alot, very descriptive. And the little brother reminded me a lot of my little brother...Except he only dyes his eyebrows brown which is really weird.....Anyways it ...

Your advice sounds really good, but I am having a really hard time giving my character bad traits...could someone help? Here are her good traits: 1. Courageous 2. Finishes anything ...